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thats what one of my class studnet respond to me so i want fix based on what they said.
1. Hi Mahmoud,
I think your paper has a lot of potential on first draft. There’s a lot of good information written down so far, and a solid foundation to build off for a good paper.
One thing that can help your reader understand your paper is by including an overview of what you will be covering. I also think it would help to include a sentence to hint at what your evaluation of your chosen philosophic response(s) will be covering & leaning toward.
Remember: clarity for the reader should be a priority. In that line, I think changing the paragraph titles to something more descriptive & explanatory would be beneficial. I’m not sure what the questions one, two, and three are referring to exactly. So, I’m not sure what each paragraph is getting at going into them. For instance, “Question 2” could become “The problem of evil & its responses”, and that way the reader is prepared going into the paragraph for what I should be getting out of it.
Ultimately, I think your draft needs a bit more organization in regard to the focus of each subject being covered.
To reiterate, this draft has a great deal going for it. So, I think it’s just down to rearranging the pieces already on the page, and just trying to make the big picture a little clearer. But, I really like that your conclusion started to have some deep introspection happening. I think it’d be great if you could talk about how some of the readings specifically engaged you, or why you might have found them more or less convincing. That would allow for more development of your personal ideals on the matter, and offer the reader better clarity on your perspective.
Elaborating on your own perspective concerning your chosen teleological response to the problem of evil could bring your entire paper together, essentially.
I’m not too sure what else to say than that… I did notice you repeated a citation in your references. That’s getting down to the smallest nitpick I think of at this point.
Best wishes to you, and I’m sure your final paper will be looking fantastic.
and than finally write a only 100 words process letter to my professor.
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