However, the main problem is not the corrections, but the fact that you could not defend your thesis.

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The main correction should be in the “part 5 discussion and conclusion”. First you should cancel the terme “discussion” and say only “conclusion”. You can use the content of the discussion but it should be expressed in a general way. Not to adress to the SDI company. This is not a report that you wrote towards the company this is a thesis. Therefore, your expressions should be the same as the language you use in the entire text. D’ont use a recommendation language.
However, the main problem is not the corrections, but the fact that you could not defend your thesis.
For the thesis to pass, two conditions must be fulfilled:
First, the thesis must be well written. This condition is met, you are called to the defense.
The second condition is to successfully defend the thesis. Your problem arose during the defense of the thesis. During the defense, you were expected to be able to explain the main idea of the thesis, the research question, the methodology and the results you reached, which you could not do to the satisfaction of the jury. You just read the presentation you prepared. But the jurors had already read your thesis. Therefore, what was expected from you was to give more analytical and brief information about the thesis. From here, the jury concluded that you did not dominate your thesis.

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